oh, these needles of rain
the skies are full of surprises
my only choice of speech
is a quiet, topographical melody
for I bring us to forsythia
and crocus, tulip, and daffodil
a readying redbud now, then
a promise of hellebore and more
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Pic: A redbud getting ready by the Red Cedar.
Pic: A redbud getting ready by the Red Cedar.
5 comments:
I love the sound elements in this poem.
I love watching the progression of spring, too.
I can't decide if I like the line "and crocus, tulip, and daffodil" better as is for the rhythm or if I'd rather have the flowers in the order they bloom (crocus, daffodil, tulip) because I am persnickety that way. "Readying redbud" is delicious.
Nice.
Thank you, Nance, Gillian, and Steph.
Steph--I should probably change the order... it just sounded right to end with daffodil somehow. Don't freak out, but my hellebores are already here, so I'm off there too. Hehe
needles of rain! yes!
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