trees seem to really
need each other
waves too ...
waves too ...
even stones primordial
and lonely need
other stones
for blessed are the homes
and families made of
what we have
we could ask: why we are
inventing new
differences
as our world falls apart
as our words break
and separate
misplacing m-o-t-h-e-r-s
into emptily echoing
o-t-h-e-r-s
_____________
Pic: A shelter made of branches we saw on the Pinckney Potawatomi Trail on Sunday. I wonder if they are live branches that will green in the Spring. I can't wait for Spring... we've now had several of these soggy, grey days that L calls "dome days," because it feels like a grey dome has been placed over us. We had to hurry back to the trailhead on Sunday because daylight was fading fast and as it turned out, there was no sunset--just a fading into darkness. We were glad to make it back to the trailhead before we had to use our headlamps. The nice part was seeing all the light displays in Pinckney as we drove home.
7 comments:
Ooooof that last stanza. We DO invent new differences— such perfectly concise social critique.
Nice.
I usually walk the same wooded path in the woods weekly and I love watching how it changes over the seasons and the years.
I like the natural message of this poem, but the passive voice and biblical wording of the third stanza pushes me away. And I'm not sure what it's supposed to say.
The rest is so clear and so real. It's a plea at its most basic. That third stanza seems...not in the same voice.
I love the metaphor of L's Dome Days--it's perfect. We're having them in NEO as well; it feels like 5PM all day long. Sigh.
Thanks, Sarah!
Thanks, Gillian!
Engie--That's lovely. I once wanted to take a year's worth of photos from the same spot... Perhaps in 2024.
Nance--You're absolutely right... This came out pretty uneven. That third stanza could go and on one would miss it. I like the last stanza, but feel that's a bit shoehorned in too... Definitely ripe for reworking...
"5 pm all day" is another worthy (but depressing!) description of our current skies.
There was a shelter like that in the woods near our house once that lasted for months.
Steph--Someone on FB said they're constructed for controlled burns...
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