the "V' of birds overhead
is a rippling wake
the sky uniform and infinite
steals the sun
the coastline's broken crags
catch in my voice
we are a world into which
many worlds fit
but still tomorrow will not
come until
I have finished toying
with today
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5 comments:
I like the stanza that starts "We are a world..."
I like the expansiveness, yet intimacy of this poem. The idea that Nature is big, but it can be part of us resonates with me.
(I’d take out either ‘but’ or ‘yet’ in that line that uses both; using both seems redundant and weakens the line.)
Enjoy.
Steph--Thank you! Me too!
Nance--Thank you! And you are right. I needed the extra syllable, so I'm still tinkering with it.
Gillian--thanks!
I like the playfulness in this poem.
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