soon your own wholeness
enters the broken day
soon enough wishes swirl out
without boundaries
soon the longing for something
you can't yet recall
all too soon the frantic journeys
of the world
you will ask if at anytime soon
we untangle life
Yes, friend, yes! Soon, soon, soon
... just as soon as...
Pic: Baker Woods with L. Most trees are bare.
4 comments:
Can I make a suggestion?
Omigosh! Yes! Please, Steph!
I think the whole first stanza would be more powerful without the word "generic" in the first line. It makes "wholeness" more whole when it's unmodified and a better contrast with "broken" in the next line.
Thank you for the edit, Steph. I can see that... off to try it.
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