fractured from the hard symmetry of days
from the moment I open my eyes
aware of every treachery of light
of going away, of disappearing
on rivers of might have been
and what can never be again
I beg mercy of shadows
who, too, flee
from me
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Pic: A full moon tonight.
2 comments:
I like this quite a bit, but there's a problem for me in line 6.
"and can never will be again " is just so awkward.
I'm trying to think of a way to use a / in order to preserve your structure, but it's eluding me. (i.e. "and can/ never will be again"--doesn't seem quite right, either.) The rest of it is gorgeous, and I love the whole tone/meaning. Aargh.
Nance, thank you for reading with so much care (in every way)!
I think I may have vacillated between "and can never be again" and never will be again" and messed up before hitting publish. I picked the first version, so it's a bit cleaner now.
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